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The PCs’ goal in Avernus is to free Elturel, and this requires three things:

1. Bellandi’s pact with Zariel must be broken.
2. The chains holding Elturel must be severed.
3. Elturel must be returned to the Material Plane.

Of these, the essential modus operandi is the first: For most of their time in Avernus, the PCs can be strictly motivated by figuring out how to break the pact and the campaign will keep ticking along happily. In fact, it’s theoretically possible for them to actually destroy the contract only for them to then realize that, pact or no pact, Elturel is still physically stuck in Hell.

BREAKING THE PACT: There are three ways to break Bellandi’s pact.

1. Both copies of the infernal contract must be brought together and then destroyed. Destruction requires special effort, such as dipping the contracts in the River Styx, the fires of an ancient dragon (perhaps Tiamat?), or a wish
2. If Zariel is redeemed, she will cancel all of her infernal contracts.
3. If Zariel is killed, all of her infernal contracts are canceled.

SEVERING THE CHAINS: The chains holding Elturel can be severed before the infernal contract is broken, but they will simply reform. They are a metaphysical manifestation of the contract and become physically severable only when the contract no longer exists. They can be severed in four ways.

1. Zariel could do it with or without the Sword (because it was her pact which formed them).
2. The PCs could form an alliance with a powerhouse (Bel, Tiamat, or a released Gargauth; but not the planetar or any holy power other than a redeemed Zariel for metaphysical reasons).
3. The Sword of Zariel can cut the chains.
4. There is a control room for the Dock of Fallen Cities in Zariel’s Flying Fortress, which can be used to release the chains.

RETURNING ELTUREL: If the PCs break the contract and sever the chains, then Elturel is left floating above the plains of Avernus. Now what? Moving an entire city through planar space is a non-trivial task, that’s why Zariel bathed the city in the Companion’s light for fifty years in order to build up an etheric charge (see Part 4B).

Good news, though: When that negative charge was reversed to generate the energy wave that brought Elturel to Avernus, an equal and opposite charge was passed into the Companion. (That’s the reason it’s been crackling with lightning this whole time.) This means that if the planetar inside the Companion is released, it will be able to literally lift the entire city out of the Nine Hells and return it to the Material Plane.

1. The PCs can release the planetar by retrieving the adamantine key rods.
2. A redeemed Zariel can also do so.

ALTERNATIVE – GATE ESCAPE: Once Bellandi’s pact has been broken and the chains severed, it becomes possible to evacuate Elturel. (Prior to that, anyone who was in Elturel when it was brought to Avernus is bound and cannot leave the Nine Hells.) We’ll be seeding a few options for opening long-term gates that last long enough for thousands of people to pass through them into Part 7; it’s also possible that the PCs might be able to convince powerful allies (like Tiamat or Bel) to do the same.

A full-scale evacuation option, however, is a corner case I’m not going to spend time prepping unless the players jump for it. The particulars of the evacuation will depend a lot on current circumstances. Things to think about:

• How can the PCs make sure everyone in Elturel knows about the evacuation?
• Who might attempt to stop the evacuation? (Zariel launching a full-fledged devil invasion of Elturel to prevent her prizes from escaping is definitely an option at this point.)
• How will the PCs protect the gate?
• What other problems, roadblocks, and catastrophes might afflict the evacuation effort?
• What factions can help the PCs (and how)?
• What ethical quandaries need to be resolved? (For example, who gets to go first? And should some people be allowed to go at all? Some factions might not want High Rider Ikaia and his vampiric spawn coming with them.)

To make things really epic, remember that we’ve set up the metaphysics so that it’s literally the good souls in Elturel which keep the city floating above the Avernian plains. Although in this scenario the chains are no longer dragging the city down, if those souls literally leave, the whole city could begin rapidly falling. Imagine:

• A final siege upon the gate’s position by Zariel.
• One whole half of the city cracks loose and falls into the Styx below.
• The PCs desperately trying to get the last few thousand people through the gate as the ground begins to crack and crumble around them!

BARGAINING WITH ZARIEL

Things an unredeemed Zariel could potentially do:

• Give the PCs her copy of the Bellandi pact.
• Cancel the Bellandi pact outright.
• Sever or release the chains holding Elturel.
• Release the planetar from inside the Companion.

The only thing Zariel is willing to trade for is the Sword of Zariel. (The published adventure suggests a couple other possibilities, but given the scope of what Zariel is giving up — a plan 50+ years in the making and tens of thousands of new foot soldiers for her armies — it’s really difficult justifying any of them.)

I further recommend that, by default, Zariel will only trade the Sword for the physical contract itself. (Primarily because the special effort still needed to destroy the paired contracts is more interesting than just having Zariel do it herself.) Smart PCs will make sure the bargain includes a provision that Zariel won’t send a task force of devils to steal the contracts back from them.

If the PCs can sweeten the deal (giving her the Shield of the Hidden Lord, agreeing to kill one of her enemies, etc.) they might be able to get her to cancel the contract outright or sever the chains, too.

REDEEMING ZARIEL

As we’ll discuss more in Part 6D, the Sword of Zariel contains a literal spark of goodness: Zariel placed a shard of her own soul in the Sword deliberately, knowing that the devils were coming for her and sensing her own weakness. The Sword will thus offer the PCs an opportunity to redeem Zariel if they have the chance.

If Zariel is redeemed, she can (and will):

• Cancel all of her infernal contracts.
• Sever the chains holding Elturel.
• Release the planetar.

This is more or less the “official” or “best” ending of Descent Into Avernus. If the PCs can pull off the redemption, they pretty much solve the whole problem in one fell swoop.

ALTERNATIVE – DREAM MACHINE REDEMPTION: As an alternative to the Sword of Zariel, it might also be possible to redeem Zariel by somehow maneuvering her into the dream machine with Lulu, forcing her to relive her memories, and, thus, giving her the opportunity to make a different choice.

This seems like a pretty long shot. But if one of the players make a 1,000 IQ play and they somehow manage to pull it off, more power to them. (Knocking Zariel unconscious and literally dragging her into the machine is one way. In her hubris, she’d probably also be willing to agree to get into the dream machine for a price considerably lower than the Sword of Zariel.)

RAID ON THE FLYING FORTRESS

In Part 7D, I’ll be redesigning Zariel’s Flying Fortress using the Raiding the Death Star! scenario structure. There are two things the PCs can gain by raiding the fortress:

• Zariel’s half of Bellandi’s contract.
• Access to the control room for the Dock of Fallen Cities (which they can use to detach the chains if the pact has been broken).

ALTERNATIVE – ASSAULT ON THE DOCK OF FALLEN CITIES: I’ve put the control room for the Dock of Fallen Cities on the flying fortress mostly to simplify my prep. In practice, there are some shortcomings: You can justify Zariel having the controls on her mothership, but logically it probably makes more sense for the Dock’s control center to be onsite. There’s also a real risk of déjà vu (with the PCs raiding the fortress for the contract, going to destroy the contract, and then having to raid the fortress again to disengage the chains). You can work around this by either allowing the PCs to set the controls to disengage once the contract is destroyed (so they can do both tasks in one raid) OR by making the second raid distinct and interesting in some way (by increasing security, for example).

Alternatively, you could move the control center to some spire or turret in the Dock of Fallen Cities and prep an alternative scenario in which the PCs (having somehow destroyed the contract) must now assault the Dock and release the chains!

(For example, you could take this map, put this map at the bottom of it, and then put this map on top of the second map. Stock it up with a devilish security team and some magical defenses and away you go.)

POWERFUL ALLIES

There are some very powerful allies (or, at least, allies of convenience) that the PCs can make in Avernus. Likely candidates include Bel, Tiamat, and Gargauth (if he’s freed from the Shield of the Hidden Lord). Kostchtchie, Crokek’toeck, Yeenoghu, and maybe even Shummrath are significantly less likely options.

These allies can:

• Help the PCs kill Zariel. (Without such aid, it’s extremely unlikely the PCs can pull this off.)
• Sever the chains holding Elturel.

Almost without exception, all of them are more likely to do the latter than the former. And, of course, getting any of them to help is going to come at a price.

UNLOCKING THE COMPANION

Unlocking the Companion requires nine adamantine control rods which were lost when Zariel’s previous flying fortress crashed (DIA, p. 118). The unlocking process is briefly described on DIA, p. 154.

Note that I’m deliberately getting rid of the option of shattering the Companion by hitting it with the Sword of Zariel. Because the Sword can also sever the chains, my personal preference is for it not to be a one-stop shop for solving the whole problem. Your mileage may vary, however, and there’s nothing inherently wrong with a Sword-wielding PC swooping up and hacking the planetar out of its prison.

ALTERNATIVE – RODS, RODS, EVERYWHERE: As written, all nine adamantine control rods are located in the wrecked flying fortress. Alternatively, the fortress could have been looted decades ago and the rods scattered across the Avernian plains. Maybe Zariel has recovered some and they’re in her current fortress; maybe Bel has some; maybe some warlords prize them; maybe Maggie has one and doesn’t even know what it is (the PCs see it early in the campaign and later realize – OMG! – it was right in front of them the whole time!).

This will extend the campaign, but can be used to push the PCs into interacting more widely/deeply with locations in Avernus.

REVELATION LIST: THE BIG THREE

There are a number of revelations necessary for the PCs to complete the Avernian quest, so let’s whip up some revelation lists. Like the list in Part 3C: The Vanthampur Revelations, I’m including brief descriptions of each clue for clarity since many of these clues refer to material that won’t be available until after this post goes live.

HOW TO FREE ELTUREL: Break the pact and sever the chains to free the city. Then you’ll still need to find a way to take it home.

• Liashandra. The demon sent to stop Zariel from claiming Elturel will happily share her knowledge of how it can be prevented.
• Bel’s Forge. The original plans for the Dock of Fallen Cities would spell it out.
• Gargauth. If pushed to the brink (see Addendum: Playing Gargauth), Gargauth can explain how to save Elturel.
• Dock of Fallen Cities. (Partial) The control instrumentation would indicate that the chains cannot be disengaged unless the pact has been broken.

HOW TO BREAK THE PACT: Get the other half of the contract from Zariel, kill her, or make a bargain with her.

• Sylvira and Traxigor. They explain this in their “mission briefing” before the PCs go to Hellturel.
• Pherria Jynx & Ravengard. If the PCs tell them that they have Bellandi’s copy of the contract, Jynx knows enough lore to recognize what they have to do. Ravengard will explicitly tell them that this is what they should do.
• Gargauth.
• Talking to almost anyone in Hell. Pretty much everybody in Hell knows how to break an infernal contract.

HOW TO SEVER THE CHAINS: Can’t be done until the infernal contract is broken. Requires someone or something of incredible power. Zariel herself could do it using the control room on her flying fortress.

• Studying the Chains. DC 16 Intelligence (Arcana) check while studying the chains with proper tools/spells will make it clear how much strength would be required; and possibly that the chains have a remote connection to something that must be controlling them.
• Liashandra. She doesn’t know where the control room is, but knows that it must exist.
• Bel’s Forge. The original plans for the Dock of Fallen Cities. Bel himself may also offer it in trade.
• Gargauth. If pushed to the brink, Gargauth can tell them how “impossible” it is to release the chains.

HOW TO RETURN ELTUREL: Open the Companion and free the planetar.

• Bel’s Forge. The original plans for the Dock of Fallen Cities or Companion reveal the negative charge built up in the Companion.
• Dock of Fallen Cities Control Room. Instrumentation reveals the negative charge built up in the Companion.
• Gargauth. If pushed to the brink, Gargauth knows the planetar can save the city.

REVELATION LIST: ADDITIONAL REVELATIONS

The revelations above reveal WHAT the PCs need to do. These supporting revelations point to HOW they can do it.

ZARIEL WANTS THE SWORD: And therefore might be willing to trade something for it.

• The Vision from Torm (Lulu’s Memories)
• Maggie (Fort Knucklebones). She’s an expert in Zariel lore.
• Original Hellriders. Any of the original Hellriders know how important the Sword is to Zariel.
• Swordhunters. Found throughout the Avernian plains, seeking Zariel’s long-standing bounty for its recovery.

THE TRUE NATURE OF THE SOLAR INSIDIATOR: There’s a planetar locked inside (and maybe you should free it).

• Bel’s Forge. Where the Companion was built. The original plans can be found there; they have been notated to indicate that the control rods were lost in the wreck of Zariel’s previous flying fortress.
• Dock of Fallen Cities Control Room. Instrumentation reveals true nature of the Companion.
• Gargauth. Gargauth knows. He may be willing to reveal this information without being pushed to the brink if circumstances / the offer is right.

BEL’S FORGE IS WHERE THE COMPANION WAS BUILT: And you can find out how to open it there.

• Maggie (Fort Knucklebones). Knows the Companion was designed at Bel’s Forge.
• Gargauth. Doesn’t know how to open the Companion, but knows it was built at Bel’s Forge.
• Dock of Fallen Cities Control Room. Instrumentation bears Bel’s forgemark.

LOCATION OF THE CRASHED FLYING FORTRESS: Where the adamantine control rods are.

• Bel. He knows.
• Maggie. She knows.
• Avernian Warlord Rumors. PCs can hunt for rumors (see Part 7I).

THE SPARK IN THE SWORD: The Sword of Zariel contains a spark of Zariel’s divine light (and could be used to redeem her). This is not a proper revelation, but it is a significant info-dump so it may be worth pointing out here.

• Lulu’s Memories. Foreshadow the truth.
• Claiming the Sword. The moment of claiming the Sword makes it crystal clear that the spark exists (and why it exists). See Part 6D.

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NODE 5: FATIMA’S SHRINE

(169 Page Street West, St. Paul, MN)

• Across the Mississippi River from downtown St. Paul.
• Couple blocks off the streetcar lines.

THE HOUSE

Back Door: Leads to kitchen.

Front Entry: Front door leads to a small coat room. Stairs lead up to the indoor garden and front room.

• Gardening boots on the mat, but no coats on the hooks. (The boots, on closer inspection, are unused.)
• Architecture / Evidence Collection: There’s a secret hatch in the wall behind the coat rack. (You can grab the rack and pull the whole wall away.) Behind the hatch is a staircase leading to the basement.

Indoor Garden: Opens from the front room.

• Glass walls let in the sun.
• Tiered platforms hold numerous flowering plants.
• Biology: The flowers growing here are Rosa richardii, acacia, willowherb, dragonwort, and Crinum lilies. These are all species notably native to Egypt. (Medicine 1 / History: Historically, all of these species had medical applications in Egypt and, later, the Mediterranean in general).

Front Room: Opens to the indoor garden. Doors to the kitchen and two bedrooms.

• Well-accoutered. A sofa, two chairs, and a coffee table.
• The coffee table has a magazine rack on one side with several magazines in it.
• Evidence Collection: The magazine are all from January 1925.

Kitchen: Backdoor leads to the backyard. Another door leads to the front room.

• Everything looks normal at first glance. But casual inspection reveals that the cupboards are empty and the food packages on the counters are also empty.
• Icebox: Empty. There’s no ice.
• Kitchen Table: There’s a stack of Prop: 13 Black Cats Flyers on the table.

Bedrooms: Each has a door leading to the front room.

• Single Beds: The quilts
• Bedside Table: Drawer empty.
• Closets: Empty.

Basement Shrine: Stairs down from the hidden panel in the front entry.

• Basement has been converted into a work space, with a large table in the middle of the room.
• Letter: Prop: Letter to Gladys is lying on the table.
• Photostat Machine: With more Prop: 13 Black Cat Flyers next to it.
• Shrine: On the far wall, there’s a shrine built around a Hamsa made from lapis lazuli. Stubby white candles covered in melted wax surround the hand. (If the Hamsa is removed, the Eye of Ra can be found carved into the wall behind it.)
• Map of the Twin Cities: Thumb-tacked to the wall. (Prop: Map of the Twin Cities)

GM Background: The map shows locations Alicia Corey was investigating for possible Tanit cultist activity. The only non-eliminated location on the map (labeled “Harriet”) is the Node 4: Harriet Tubman’s Asylum for Colored Orphans. The name “John Barca” has also been written on the map, perhaps allowing the PCs to research him.

MAP OF THE TWIN CITIES

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LETTER TO GLADYS

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As the PCs leave Elturel, I think the time has come to take a step back and look at the big picture: They’re in Avernus now. So what are they trying to do, exactly?

This post takes a close look at how the adventure is currently structured (and the problems I have with that structure). Then the rest of Part 6 is going to present the big picture of how we’re going to remix this structure. We’ll want this big picture to get us oriented in Part 7: Exploring Avernus and keep us pointed in the right direction as we wrap things up in Part 8: The End.

QUICK SUMMARY: THE ORIGINAL CAMPAIGN

1. The PCs indirectly get a vision from Torm which reveals that (a) Lulu helped hide the Sword of Zariel before she lost her memories and (b) she talked to a couple of kenku at some point after doing so. (The NPCs are all convinced the Sword of Zariel will save Elturel, although it is not explained how or why.)
2. Lulu remembers that she met the kenku at Fort Knucklebones, so the PCs go there.
3. Lulu remembers that the Sword of Zariel was at Haruman’s Hill, so the PCs go there. (It isn’t.)
4. Lulu remembers two other locations that will lead to the Sword of Zariel, so the PCs choose one of them and go there.
5. Each location is the starting point of a different linear railroad. If the PCs follow the railroad they’ve selected, they eventually get the Sword of Zariel.

THE PROBLEM WITH LULU’S MEMORIES

As you can see above, recovering/following Lulu’s memories is the key to the entire adventure.

When the PCs first meet Lulu and she starts tagging along with them, we’re given the back story of what actually happened (DIA, p. 51) and a little table of random memories that she can intermittently recover during the adventure. This is clever, giving the DM a simple tool for keeping this central theme/plot gimmick consistently in focus as the campaign progresses.

Having made Lulu’s memories the central plot gimmick of Descent Into Avernus, however, you might conclude that the designers would make sure that her back story is crystal clear to the DM, ensuring that this absolutely vital continuity is easily handled without error.

You would be wrong.

In fact, Lulu’s back story doesn’t even make sense. For example, the vision from Torm says, “The elephant knows! After hiding the Sword she met some kenku!” And Lulu says: “I remember! The kenku live at Fort Knucklebones! Let’s go!”

But:

1. If you flip back to the summary of Lulu’s story (DIA, p. 51), neither the kenku nor Fort Knucklebones appears. This is an egregious oversight. However, you can eventually conclude that her visit there MUST have happened when “Lulu wandered Avernus for months” after Zariel’s fall.
2. Those kenku, although still alive, should definitely be dead. Zariel’s fall happened in 1354 DR and Lulu “wandered Avernus for months.” That means she met the kenku 140 years ago. Kenku only live for 60 years.
3. The kenku are at Fort Knucklebones because they work for Mad Maggie. But when Mad Maggie first came to Avernus (and before going to Knucklebones), “she “found pieces of a beautiful tapestry that chronicled the fall of Zariel.”

So within a few months of Zariel’s fall:

• Someone made a tapestry;
• The tapestry was ripped to shreds;
• Mad Maggie found the tapestry;
• Mad Maggie founded Fort Knucklebones; and then
• Lulu came to Fort Knucklebones (meeting some kenku who are, I guess, immortal).

You can kind of shuffle things around so that this makes sense (change it so that Maggie didn’t find the tapestry and become interested in Zariel lore until recently, long after founding Fort Knucklebones; which also explains why she didn’t pump Lulu for all the information she knows about Zariel the FIRST time she met Lulu), but it’s still a massive continuity glitch sitting right in the middle of a crucial scenario hook in the middle of the campaign.

And this is just one example! Lulu’s timeline is filled with contradictions and inconsistencies!

Descent Into Avernus positions this as THE central mystery of the campaign, but then it basically doesn’t have a coherent solution to the mystery. It’s like a murder mystery that can’t quite make up its mind about who committed the murder.

DIA: You MUST figure this out!

Players: Yes! We NEED to find the answers to this!

DIA: Find the answers to what now?

We’ll be sorting this out in Part 6D: Lulu’s Memories.

THE KENKU PROBLEM

Remember those kenku?

Descent Into Avernus says, “Find the kenku! They knew Lulu back in Ye Olde Days! They’ll have valuable information that will help you to find the Sword!”

So the PCs go to Fort Knucklebones. They find the kenku. The adventure says, “The kenku Chukka and Clonk instantly recognize Lulu, since they’ve met her previously.” And then… nothing.

Literally nothing.

The kenku remembering Lulu is, as far as I can tell, never mentioned again. And if the players decide to push the issue and try to get the valuable information they were promised, there’s absolutely nothing for the DM to give them.

This isn’t just a dead end either: Remember that the kenku DO remember Lulu. Even if they don’t have any vital information, there’s still a story to be told here — a lost fragment of Lulu’s memories to recover in a scenario which has been explicitly positioned as being about recovering Lulu’s memories. It’s not that Descent Into Avernus says “nothing to find here”; it’s that Descent Into Avernus just completely forgets the reason the PCs came to Fort Knucklebones.

It was almost incomprehensible to me that such an egregious oversight could have made it into print… until I took a step back and tried to understand the designers’ mental paradigm.

What we are, in fact, talking about here is the scenario structure. I’ve talked in the past about the fact that D&D (and RPGs in general) do a pretty terrible job of teaching scenario structures to new DMs. In fact, they’ve historically only taught one (dungeoncrawling), and in 5^th Edition they’ve even failed to do that. (5^th Edition notably doesn’t teach a new DM how to key a map — or even provide an example of a keyed map! — let alone teach them how to use it in play.)

Without primary sources, new DMs are largely learning their scenario structures from published examples. But it’s been decades now and the communal knowledgebase is atrophying. It’s gotten so bad that even a lot of professional designers don’t know how scenarios are supposed to be structured, so even the published examples that DMs used to be able to learn from are degenerating.

Which brings us to Descent Into Avernus: The designers don’t actually have a functional scenario structure. They’ve instead flailed themselves into a sort of malformed scenario structure which consists entirely of:

1. An NPC tells the PCs where to go.
2. The PCs go there.

The entire campaign is just this one “structure” repeated infinitely: An NPC tells you where to go. You go there and you find another NPC who tells you where to go.

So when it comes to the kenku, the designers aren’t designing a situation; they aren’t thinking of the game world as a real place. They aren’t even thinking about what the players’ actual experience will be (what they’ll be thinking, what they’ll want, etc.). They’re thinking of the kenku strictly as another McGuffin in a long string of McGuffins: They needed a mechanism to move the PCs from Elturel to Fort Knucklebones. The kenku were that device. The PCs are now at the Fort. Therefore, the kenku are done.

And, thus, the kenku are immediately dropped.

Furthermore, because this malformed structure is apparently ALL THEY HAVE, it seems to have become a kind of cargo cult for them:  They know that NPC A has to give some sort of “explanation” for why the PCs need to go to NPC B, but they frankly don’t care what the explanation is.

And they assume the players won’t care either. The presumption is that the players are onboard; that the players share their understanding that “the NPC tells me where to go and then I go there” is the one and only way that things work.

The designers expect that players to immediately transition to the “make Mad Maggie happy” mini-game they’ve designed without ever questioning the kenku about the thing they came here to question the kenku about because they literally never gave a shit about the ostensible reason the PCs were looking for the kenku.

I call this the Kenku Problem. And once you’ve seen it, you really can’t unsee it. It explains A LOT of the problems Descent Into Avernus has:

• Why do they keep putting Must Have Encounters™ behind secret doors? Because if the PCs haven’t found the NPC to tell them where to go next, clearly the players will know to keep looking until they find them!
• Why are the PCs told to go talk to people without being given any reason for doing so? Because the REASON is irrelevant. It’s white noise surrounding the operative phrase of “go talk to <insert name>.”
• Why are the PCs told what will be inside the puzzlebox by the same guy who tells them to “go talk to <insert name> to have the puzzlebox opened” (thus murdering the pay-off for doing so)? Because they don’t care about the mystery and they don’t think you’ll care either. The only reason the “mystery” exists is so that you’ll go talk to <insert name>.
• Why does the adventure assume the PCs will simply plane shift to Hell without having any reason to do so? Because an NPC told them to! (Why not have the NPC give them a coherent reason? Because it doesn’t matter!)

This superficially makes it seem as if the NPCs are all-important! But, ironically, they’re not. They’re just cogs in the machine; their sole function to point you to the next cog. This is why the adventure doesn’t care enough about Kreeg’s history to make it consistent. Nor Zariel’s. Nor Lulu’s. Nor Ravengard’s. Nor the kenku. Nor… well, anybody.

Ravengard tells you to talk to the kenku. The kenku tell you to talk to Mad Maggie.

Nothing else matters.

Note: There are twenty-nine (!) writers credited in Descent Into Avernus. It is quite plausible that when I’m ascribing creative decisions to the “designers” here what I’m actually doing is anthropomorphizing artifacts from whatever development process was used to create and stitch together all of those contributions. By the same token, the book still managed to get to press without anybody saying, “Hey… What do those kenku know about Lulu? Isn’t that the whole reason the PCs came here?” And it won’t stop a DM from getting wrong-footed by the adventure-as-written in actual play.

THE KNUCKLEBONES PROBLEM

Fort Knucklebones itself suffers from a common problem I see in adventure design: Interstitial content that’s not supported by the main line of activity.

The fort is filled with encounters that all start with some variation of, “While the PCs are here…”

• “At some point during their visit, the characters see the kenku…”
• “Characters who witness this can…”
• “As events play out in Fort Knucklebone, the characters notice…”

And so forth.

There’s absolutely nothing wrong with interstitial content: The world should not be strictly reactive (the PCs do something and the world reacts); it should also be proactive (stuff happens in the world and the PCs can react to it).

But for interstitial content to work, there MUST be enough stuff for the PCs to actively engage with so that there’s enough time for the interstitial encounters to be triggered. And this is not the case here. Instead, as soon as the PCs enter Fort Knucklebones this happens:

They immediately meet Mad Maggie. They tell her what they want. She immediately takes them to a dream machine and recovers Lulu’s memories. Lulu immediately declares she knows where the Sword is. The PCs will then immediately leave. (Why wouldn’t they?)

No narrative space is given for the PCs to just hang out at Fort Knucklebone, which means that all of the “hanging out at Fort Knucklebone” encounters will never happen.

It’s possible that the fort was originally intended to be some sort of hub or home base for the PCs so that these interstitial encounters would play out over the course of several visits, but as written it isn’t. In any case, the encounters as written are supposed to play out before Maggie gives them supplies (because their outcome is supposed to influence that), even though there’s a continual stream of uninterrupted interaction with Maggie from the moment they enter the base until she gives them the supplies.

You can kind of half-ass a solution by simply injecting extra time into the main line of Maggie’s activities. For example:

• Instead of immediately meeting the kenku and having them immediately bring Maggie to the PCs, the PCs have to find the kenku and then go to Maggie (so that they explore the fort a bit and meet some of the people there before meeting her).
• It will take Maggie some time to assemble the dream machine. Probably a few hours should suffice, during which time the PCs can do all the other things.

If you want to full-ass a solution, though, you’ll want to figure out some sort of active agenda the PCs could be pursuing at the fort while waiting for Maggie to finish the machine. Otherwise they’re just twiddling their thumbs. Instead of Maggie automatically giving them supplies, for example, maybe they need to get properly outfitted for Avernus here.

As described in Part 6C: Quest of the Dream Machine, the Remix will, in fact, make Fort Knucklebones a de facto hub that the PCs are likely to make their homebase and return to multiple times.

THE CHOOSE YOUR RAILROAD PROBLEM

Let’s be blunt: Choose Your Railroad is a terrible scenario structure.

It’s almost an oxymoron. You recognize that choice is important, but then you immediately discard it in favor of a long string of Kenku Problem interactions lightly spiced with meaningless fetch quests.

(A quick digression on fetch quests: A fetch quest is any time an NPC tells a PC to get a Plot Coupon and return it to them; or, vice versa, when the NPC gives the PC a Plot Coupon and tells them to take it some place else. A meaningful fetch quest is one where the PCs care about the Plot Coupon and its disposition. A meaningless fetch quest is one where only the NPC cares about the Plot Coupon and the only reason the PCs are delivering it is because they want the NPC to do something else for them; as a result, the actual Plot Coupon and what you’re doing with it is inconsequential and could easily be swapped out for any other arbitrary items/locations.)

This is very much a variation of the broken Choose Your Own Adventure design technique, and it’s particularly painful here because Descent Into Avernus actually promises to deliver this incredible, open-ended exploration of Avernus before yanking it away.

But the problems with the adventure’s Choose Your Railroad go much deeper than the fact that it’s just a bad idea in principle. It’s actually difficult to explain how poorly this is done.

So the PCs have Mad Maggie use her dream machine on Lulu. Lulu wakes up and says, “The sword! The sword! I know where it is!”

(Spoilers: She doesn’t.)

Her “dreams lead the characters on a wild goose chase to Haruman’s Hill.”

First: There’s no clear reason given for why Lulu thinks Haruman’s Hill is where the sword is.

Second: Given the timeline, it’s fairly clear that Haruman’s Hill did not and could not exist when Lulu was in Avernus.

But, OK. Fine. This thing that makes no sense happens. The PCs go adventuring at Haruman’s Hill for a little while, they figure out that Lulu took them to the wrong place, and Lulu says:

“I’m so sorry! My memory is a little hazier than I thought! Having pondered my dreams further, I think there are two sites in Avernus that are important to finding the sword! Choose between a place where demons manifest and one where demons are destroyed.”

These are, of course, the two railroads.

But, once again, there’s no reason given for why Lulu thinks either of these locations have anything to do with the Sword.

And that’s because they don’t.

They have nothing to do with the Sword. They have nothing to do with Lulu’s memories.

THERE IS NO REASON FOR LULU TO SAY YOU SHOULD GO TO THESE TWO LOCATIONS.

And this becomes abundantly clear as soon as the PCs go to them.

The first one is a harvesting station for abyssal chickens. Four (presumably redneck) devils are harvesting the chickens and bullying another devil who is mentally impaired. These guys explicitly know absolutely nothing about what the PCs are trying to do, but if the PCs bribe them they can tell them where to find a guy who MIGHT know something that can help them.

Okay. What about the other location?

Here the PCs meet a devil who knows absolutely nothing about what they’re trying to do, but if they go on a meaningless fetch quest for him he’ll give them a letter of introduction to another guy who MIGHT help them do a thing that they’re NOT doing.

So to briefly recap here:

1. Lulu takes you to the wrong location.
2. Lulu tells you two more locations to go to, but can give no reason why you should.
3. If you go to those locations, it is immediately clear that there’s no coherent reason for you to be there.

So Lulu:

1. Demonstrates she can’t be trusted to give accurate directions.
2. Fails to give accurate directions AGAIN.
3. Descent Into Avernus than assumes the PCs will just continue along the “Path” they’ve “chosen,” even though there’s no discernible reason for them to do so.

And obviously this is a “reasonable” assumption because there are, after all, NPCs telling the PCs where to go and this is a Kenku Problem.

Fixing this was non-trivial. I wasn’t sure there WAS a fix without starting over from scratch, because the adventure had really backed itself into a corner here.

If I hadn’t solved it, of course, then we wouldn’t be doing this Remix at all.

The actual railroads themselves are filled with a plethora of problems (as railroads always are), but since we’re defenestrating the whole structure there’s not a lot of value in breaking it down point by point. Our alternative structure will be laid out in Part 6C: Quest of the Dream Machine, and Part 7: Exploring Avernus will look at how to run Avernus as a true exploration campaign.

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NODE 4: HARRIET TUBMAN’S ASYLUM FOR COLORED ORPHANS

• During Jim Crow era, major orphanages would not accept black children.
• In 1905, two Quaker sisters named Anna and Hannah Glass opened Harriet Tubman’s Asylum for Colored Orphans.
• Located in a formerly abandoned hotel in the Rondo neighborhood west of downtown St. Paul.
• Anna died of typhoid in 1913, the same year that Minneapolis finally acknowledge that their municipal water was the source of the typhoid outbreaks and opened a water purification plant to solve the problem.
• There are currently 47 children.
• Small staff of female attendants (of which Perlie Coleman is representative). Marcus Washington serves as a maintenance man and is now the best thing they have to a security guard.

TANIT CULTIST ACTIVITIES

• 5 kids have been kidnapped from the asylum by Tanit cultists. (They’re taken to Node 7: Harris Chemical Plant.)
• St. Paul Police have taken cursory reports, but have concluded that the kids are just run-aways.
• The staff has been similarly unable to get the local press interested.
• If either of those things were to change, the Tanit cultists would back off and leave the other children in the asylum alone. (They assume this will happen at some point, but aren’t surprised it hasn’t yet: They picked an asylum for black children for a reason.)

INVESTIGATING

• Evidence Collection: New locks have recently been placed on the windows.
• Evidence Collection: There’s a chemical residue on the carpet Alex Griffin’s bedroom.
  • Chemistry: It’s a patented polysaccharide created by a Minneapolis company called Harris Chemical (see Node 7: Harris Chemical Plant).
• Streetwise: Canvassing the neighborhood will discover that a Harris Chemical Plant truck has been seen parked near the orphanage during the time of each disappearance. (See Node 7: Harris Chemical Plant.)

MISSING KIDS (DATE TAKEN)

• Thomas Young (August 30^th) – missing from his bed, window unlocked (staff did, in fact, assume he was run-away)
• Millie Clark (September 8^th) – snatched from the street
• Edward Robinson (October 10^th) – was missing during a headcount following a recess period
• Frances Allen (October 31^st) – missing from her bed, cheap old lock had been jimmied (staff replaced the locks on all the windows after this)
• Alex Griffin (November 11^th) – missing from his bed, window was broken, other kids in his room were slow to wake up (Medicine: they were gassed)

HANNAH GLASS

APPEARANCE:

• Prop: Photo of Hannah Glass

ROLEPLAYING NOTES

• Weary; in body, spirit, and voice
• Clasps her hands and wrings them with very small movements
• Fervently protective of the children

BACKGROUND

• Grew up in Pennsylvania. Her father was a frequent pastor in a “programmed” branch of Quakerism.
• She and her sister, Anna, became disillusioned with the program, believing fervently in the non-hierarchical structures of the faith. This estranged them from their father.
• In 1905, they opened the asylum.
• Anna died of typhoid in 1913, the same year that Minneapolis finally acknowledged that their municipal water was the source of the typhoid outbreaks and opened a water purification plant to solve the problem.
• She intends for Perlie Coleman to take over the asylum.

CLUES

• Knows the names and dates of the missing kids. (Very angry about the police and press being dismissive of it.)
• Can introduce PCs to Perlie Coleman and Marcus Washington.
• Reassurance 1: To get access to the kids.

HANNAH GLASS: Accounting 1, Bureaucracy 2, Oral History 4, Reassurance 6, Theology 5, Health 4
Alertness Modifier: +0
Stealth Modifier: +0
Weapons: fists (-2)

PERLIE COLEMAN

APPEARANCE:

• Prop: Photo of Perlie Coleman

ROLEPLAYING NOTES

• If all the investigators are white, she will be painstakingly polite until reassured that they don’t pose a danger. (This deferential self-defense also means that the PCs won’t get anything useful from her.)
• Always keeping one eye on the kids; will randomly shout out cautions to them or a kid might run up and she’ll scoop them up.
• An incredibly warm smile if she trusts you.

BACKGROUND

• Perlie is an African Methodist Episcopalian.
• She grew up in Duluth.
• Her father was lynched by a white mob when she was seven years old. Her mother immediately took Perlie and her three sisters and moved to Minneapolis.
• Her mother has gone mostly blind and can’t work any more. Perlie depends on her job here at the asylum to support her.
• She is a caretaker and teacher for the children.

CLUES

• She discovered that Alex Griffin was missing. She remembers a sort of chemical smell that was lingering in the air.

PERLIE COLEMAN: Assess Honesty 5, First Aid 5, Library Use 5, Reassurance 8, Health 4
Alertness Modifier: +0
Stealth Modifier: +0
Weapons: fists (-2)

MARCUS WASHINGTON

APPEARANCE:

• Prop: Photo of Marcus Washington

ROLEPLAYING NOTES

• Very protective of Hannah Glass and her reputation.
• Slow, powerful movements.
• A voice that sounds like a quiet river.

BACKGROUND

• An African Methodist Episcopalian.
• Began working for “the Missuses Glass” in 1906, so he’s been with the asylum almost from the beginning.
• He lives in the Rondo neighborhood. He usually walks six blocks to work.
• He’s been staying at the asylum overnight since Frances Allen was taken, acting as a sort of security guard to try to keep the kids safe. He’s incredibly angry with himself for not being able to stop Alex Griffin from being taken. He feels like he’s failed the children and Hannah.

KEY INFO

• Leveraged Clue: If the name “Harris Chemicals” is mentioned, he’ll say that there’s been a Harris Chemicals truck parked in the neighborhood recently. (He doesn’t think it’s significant and hasn’t connected it to the kidnappings, which is why he doesn’t mention it otherwise.)

MARCUS WASHINGTON: Assess Honesty 2, Athletics 5, Fleeing 2, Oral History 4, Scuffling 8, Sense Trouble 5, Streetwise 4, Health 6
Alertness Modifier: +1 (on edge)
Stealth Modifier: +0
Weapons: fists (-2)

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When you’re remixing published material you are, of course, deviating from the original version of the material: Some stuff will be thrown out. Some stuff will be changed. Some stuff will be added.

In addition to changes in the text (which are easy enough to do), this can also impact the graphical elements of the scenario. For example, the Alexandrian Remix of Dragon Heist added the idea that the Stone of Golorr would be missing its three eyes when the PCs discover it. Since this wasn’t the case in the original adventure, all the published images of the Stone naturally featured it having all three of its Eyes.

This can, obviously, also affect maps: Once you start adding new locations or moving locations around, the map is, ipso facto, changing.

When this is GM-facing material, this is relatively trivial to deal with: Just jot a quick note or scribble something onto the map to remind yourself of the change. For example, when I sketched up the point-map of Elturel, I didn’t worry too much about places where the published map had minor deviations from the Remix material. It was close enough for the GM to use it without any confusion.

When it comes to player-facing material, on the other hand, you may want to make a greater effort to seamlessly align what they’re seeing with what you’re describing. For example, you might Photoshop the image of the Stone of Golorr to show it in its blinded state so that you can use it as a handout for the players without having to say, “It looks like this, except it’s missing these bits.”

THE MAP OF ELTUREL

In the case of Elturel, we’re planning on handing the PCs a beautiful poster map of Elturel. We’re also adding a bunch of new material to the city. How can we align those things?

First, when adding locations to the city you can scan the map and try to identify existing buildings that are close enough to the location you’re adding. For example, I knew that Symbril’s House fronted the Garden, so I just looked along the edge of the Garden until I found a building that “fit” my image of Symbril’s House. Similarly, I wanted Helm’s Shieldhall to be located in the northwest section of the city. So I scanned the whole region until I found a compound that I felt was close enough to what I wanted.

Finding buildings on a beautifully detailed map like Jared Blando’s map of Elturel can also feed back into the location itself. For example, the look and location of the building I identified for the Old High Harvest Home inspired my vision of the old temple having a huge balcony/patio on every floor looking out over the lower city.

But sometimes that can only take you so far. That’s when you either need to:

• Simply say something like, “You won’t see this on the map, but…” or “This is a little bit different than what the map shows…” (And this is frequently just fine. Players are flexible and they recognize that the map is not the territory.)
• Fire up good ol’ Photoshop.

If you recall, we did this previously with the Poisoned Poseidon in Baldur’s Gate. Now we’re going to do it again with a handful of locations in Elturel.

USING THE PATCHES

For obvious ethical and legal reasons, I’m not going to present a high-resolution version of the full Elturel map with these changes made to it. Instead, I’m going to offer small patches that can be easily added to your copy of the map using any image manipulation program.

To make this process as seamless as possible, you should buy a digital copy of Jared Blando’s map from his online store. The patches I present below maintain the same resolution, so you should be able to align them onto the image with just a few seconds of work.

(You can get versions of the map at considerably lower resolutions through various VTT packages, but it will be harder to seamlessly apply the patch.)

KEEP OF THE TWIN SUNS

Let’s start with the Keep of the Twin Suns. I placed this just inside the Dusk Gate on the east side of the city and described it as arching above the street to act almost like a second gatehouse.

You can see here how I simply expanded the existing buildings to make structure more explicit.

MAIDEN’S LEAP

If you look at the older reference material for Elturel, you’ll discover references to the Maidens’ Leap or Maiden’s Leap: A waterfall at the north end of the High District that cascades down into a lake below that flow into the city’s canals. I thought this was cool and actually worked that image of High Watcher Bellandi leaping from the Maiden’s Leap into the Night of the Red Coup before belatedly noticing that the cliff face had been eliminated from the new map.

If you look at the digital version of the map WotC scanned from Forgotten Realms Adventures, it’s pretty easy to see how this happened:

Although the falls are keyed (#3), it does sort of look as if you could just walk around the lake and up into the Gardens. The Forgotten Realms Interactive Atlas makes it clear, however, that this is not the case:

(A version of Elturel where the Gardens actually DO slope down through the High District bluff, with cliff walls to either side of the Gardens getting higher and higher the father north you go is also potentially cool. But the Hellturel map doesn’t really depict that, either.)

In any case, this patch should be sufficient to make it clear to the players that their PCs can’t just walk up into the High District from the north side (without climbing a sheer cliff).

THE CANAL

A key question for me looking at the map of Hellturel was, “Where is the lava coming from?” I decided to answer that question by postulating that the spring beneath the High Hall had been fiendishly transformed by the transition to Avernus so that it now spewed lava instead.

However, the original map depicted lava pouring into the rift from both sides, thus negating the explanation for how lava was reaching the east side of the city.

This was my solution: The rift must have been created during the Spellplague (for reasons previously discussed in the Remix), and it follows logically that the Elturians must have built a canal bridge spanning the rift in order to keep water flowing into the canals. Ergo, the lava could just cross this same canal bridge and continue into the Dock District canals.

Someone with better Photoshop skills than I could probably make this idea more explicitly clear on the map itself. But this patch is enough for my purposes.

THE RIVER OF FIRE

Speaking of the lava spring beneath the High Hall, I wanted to add the river of lava running down the center of the Garden because… well… it’s awesome.

The Maiden’s Leap is included in this patch. I present it separately above for anyone who wants to keep the cliff face but is indifferent to the river of fire.

THE DOCK WALLS

Finally, here’s something that I decided to just leave alone.

See those rivers of lava? They really shouldn’t be rivers of lava.

If you look at the original maps of Elturel, it’s once again not hard to see what happened:

Those blue lines were interpreted as water. But they’re not: Those are the walls around the Dragoneye Dealing Coster. That bright blue color is used throughout the Forgotten Realms Adventures to denote walled compounds and major structures (that’s why the buildings are also bright blue). You can see a similar example on the map of Daerlun a few pages earlier, for example:

Why not fix it?

Several reasons:

• I felt the amount of work required to revise the map outweighed any potential gain.
• I don’t think my Photoshop skills are good enough to make the alteration aesthetically seamless. (I would compromise the quality of the map.)
• I don’t think it matters that much. Whether it’s lava canals or a wall, the place is geographically distinct and somewhat fortified. This isn’t a major focus of the scenario for me.
• I, personally, think the walled Dragoneye Coster compound is probably about two times larger than it should be compared to the rest of the docks. (I want room for there to be some other coster companies, too, plus some independent operators.) I’d be happier with something like this (where the Dragoneye still have personal access to the Market, but they don’t chew up the entire dock front):

Your mileage might vary on any of these, of course.

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