Privateer Press blasts its way into the D20 marketplace with a module of surpassing quality and a setting whose merest hints are inherently intriguing.

Review Originally Published May 21st, 2001

When The Longest Night, Book One of Privateer Press’ Witchfire Trilogy, showed up in my mailbox it immediately drew my attention:

First, it was 64 pages for $9.95 – which, if the material inside was of any quality at all, would make it a fairly great value in the D20 marketplace.

Second, the book’s artwork and layout were extremely slick. In fact, of all the first-time D20 publishers, I would have to say that Privateer Press has put together the best-looking inaugural product so far. (For those of you who don’t care what a product looks like, consider: If someone’s willing and capable of putting together a visually appealing product, it vastly increases the chances that they cared enough to make the actual meat of the product worth biting into.)

Finally, the first page I flipped open to was page 11 – which features a great picture of an “industrial steamjack” (which is also found in the background of the back cover). For lack of a better description, a steamjack is basically a steampunk mecha.

Admittedly, this last element made me more than a little skeptical of the book’s claim that the DM could “easily replace the names of gods, locations, and the like” in order to use the adventure in any campaign world. But it did leave me seriously intrigued about the Iron Kingdoms setting which Privateer Press is introducing here.

SETTING

Warning: This review will contain spoilers for The Witchfire Trilogy. Players who may find themselves playing in this adventure should not read beyond this point.

The first dozen pages of The Longest Night present the merest inklings of the Iron Kingdoms setting, with most of the focus being set upon Corvis – the city in and around which the adventure takes place. A few highlights:

The Iron Kingdoms are most notably set apart from other fantasy settings by their possession of steam technology. The most impressive display of this technology is the steamjack: A robotic entity (which looks a lot like a heavy gear to me, but I’m biased) which is powered by steam and given a brain by magic, and on which the rapid growth of the Iron Kingdoms has been built.

The Kingdom of Cygnar, in which the city of Corvis is to be found, was founded roughly 400 years ago at the end of the Orgoth Empire. Little is known of the Empire, but its ruins and relics can still be found throughout the Iron Kingdoms. Cygnar was ruled by a tyrant as recently as a few decades ago. Fortunately, the tyrant (Raelthorne) was overthrown by Leto, his younger brother. Unfortunately, Raelthorne escaped – and many of his cronies have simply slipped through the cracks.

Corvis, itself, is a port city built upon the junction of two major rivers. It is also built in the middle of a swamp, which has given it a unique architecture: Instead of building out, the city has built up. The lowest levels of the city (the Undercity) have actually sunk beneath the swamp itself, creating a series of what are essentially urban dungeons in which a wide variety of creatures can be found. At the highest levels the rich and powerful can be found, and inbetween is everyone else.

The Longest Night gives us only the meresting inklings of what the complete Iron Kingdoms setting will hold, but what’s here is extremely intriguing: First, Staroscik has laid out a geography which makes it easy to justify dungeon complexes and ruins: Either they’re sunken catacombs beneath the city, or ruins of the Orgoth Empire, or the remnant of a resistance movement. Next, he gives you a number of different places from which to spice an adventure – villains who escaped with Raelthorne’s rule, ancient imperial relics, and so forth. Finally, he wraps all of this up into a great fantasy setting, which is given a very unique character through the light application of a few steampunk elements – not enough to overwhelm the traditional fantasy atmosphere, but more than enough to add a little excitement.

ADVENTURE

Ten years ago a coven of witches in Corvis was executed, with the town universally condemning them to death. The truth, however, was that the trial was the machination of a corrupt politician – Magistrate Borloch — who had first used the coven to gain power and then set them up in order to cover his own back. Actually, there is a deeper truth: Borloch himself had been manipulated by the mage Vahn Oberen. Oberen had set the entire chain of events in motion so that he could act as the witch’s executioner, chopping their heads off with the arcane Witchfire – a blade which would allow him to steal the sorcerous powers of the witches.

Unfortunately for Oberen, things didn’t go exactly according to plan: He did execute the witches, but was knocked unconscious by the powerful forces flowing into him. Borloch rushed the mage away before his identity could be discovered, and Father Dumas, the head of the local church who was seeing to the burial of the witches, unwittingly entombed the Witchfire with them.

Fast forward ten years: Alexia Ciannor, Dumas’ nieceand the daughter of one of the coven members, was only a young girl when her mother was executed. Now, however, she is a powerful sorceress in her own right – and hungry for revenge.

The PCs get involved when Alexia starts stealing corpses, and Father Dumas asks them to find out who’s doing it. The PCs will eventually figure out that the corpses are the jurors from the trial of the coven ten years ago (Alexia is practicing her abilities to create the undead and getting some of her revenge at the same time). This will lead them to the crypt in which four of the witches were buried (the fifth, Alexia’s mother, and the Witchfire are entombed at the Church in Corvis – a warning against all others who would practice witchcraft). There they will learn that Alexia has raised them as well (she is attempting to bring the entire coven back to “life”). This will eventually take them to Alexia’s hideout in the Undercity, but she will escape – leading them to the abandoned Fort Rhyker, where Alexia has slowly been creating an army of undead. The adventure wraps up when Alexia marches her undead forces against the city of Corvis, using them as a distraction so that she can strike at her mother’s tomb – raising her from the dead and seizing the Witchfire. Oberen will attempt to seize the Witchfire at this time, as well, and the PCs will be decisive in determining which of the two sorcerors end up with the blade.

(The reason the adventure is called The Longest Night can be found in the timing of Alexia’s attack: She chooses to strike during the Longest Night Festival – so called because it takes place during an eclipse which blackens the sky for an entire day.)

WEAKNESSES

The biggest problem I found in the adventure was in the initial investigation sequence (during which the PCs are attempting to figure out the identity of the person stealing the corpses). Staroscik needs to strew around a lot more clues in this section if he seriously expects PCs to figure out what’s going on (without, of course, having the DM lead them by the nose from one clue to another). Here’s a rule of thumb that’s always served me well in designing mystery scenarios: Assume that the PCs will miss one clue in three, and you’ll probably have your bases covered. Staroscik, on the other hand, seems to assume that the PCs are going to track down every single bread crumb he plants. He’s wrong, and quite a few playing groups are going to find themselves wandering around without a clue (pun intended).

The only other problem with the adventure’s structure is to be found immediately after the PCs return from the tomb of the first four witches. Staroscik points out that the PCs will have probably figured out that Alexia is somehow involved in all of this (although his exact reasoning here is a little vague – again, more clues are necessary). He then proceeds to stonewall them from actually going after Alexia (the guard will ignore their accusations, Father Dumas will oppose them, etc.) – forcing them to simply follow her until she can lead them to her secret hide-out.

First off, stonewalling the PCs is just not cool. And, furthermore, there’s no need to do it here. If the PCs do go after Alexia, then they can still end up in her secret base by having her take them there. What’s really annoying is that Staroscik actually sets up all the pieces to make this work (including an escape plan for Alexia once they’ve reached her secret base beneath the city), but encourages DMs to stonewall their PCs anyway. Silly and clumsy.

My biggest gripe (as opposed to a serious problem) with The Longest Night is the lack of steamjack stats. This is a major oversight, not only because they seem to be pushed as one of the really unique elements of the setting, but also because Staroscik uses one in the course of the adventure. Although the oversight can be worked around, it shouldn’t have to be.

The only other problems are nothing more than nitpicks, really: The map of Corvis provided (which is done in a historical style – which is to say that it’s more a picture of the city with certain locations keyed) doesn’t seem to really match the description in the text (and a number of locations are left unkeyed). Some boxed text didn’t get boxed (but should obviously be read outloud to the PCs). The maps of Fort Rhyker are very confusing and need to be puzzled out to a degree because the relationships between staircases are not immediately apparent (each floor and section of the fort is printed on a completely separate page). At one point Staroscik claims that a protection form evil spell will prevent Alexia from entering an area – but Alexia’s write-up lists her as neutral, not evil. Minor typos. That type of thing.

STRENGTHS

All right, before I nitpick the product to death, let’s take a look at the strengths of The Longest Night (which are considerable):

First off, as I note above, the setting is extremely well-designed. And, surprisingly, the city of Corvis and its surroundings can be easily included into any generic fantasy world. Removing the steam technology (which is really the only potentially jarring element of the adventure) can be accomplished by simply ignoring it whenever it’s included. (On the other hand, you could include Corvis as a city in which this new technology is just now being pioneered.) Staroscik makes this an even more attractive proposition by loading the city, even in its brief coverage here, with elements and adventure seeds which go far beyond the scope of this single adventure.

Second, the adventure itself – like the setting – can easily be incorporated into campaign setting. Corvis provides a distinct backdrop for the adventure, but Staroscik is careful to keep the structure of the adventure separate from the backdrop – so replacing Corvis with any other city of your choosing is easily accomplished.

And, of course, the adventure is worth playing. Despite a handful of minor structural flaws (which are easily fixed – increasing the number of places a clue can be found and ignoring Staroscik’s advice to stonewall your PCs should take you all of about five minutes), The Longest Night has a great plot, set-up, and cast of characters. It is also an adventure which hits a lot of different notes: You’ve got an investigation, an urban dungeon, a wilderness dungeon, a fortress, and a siege by the undead.

The Longest Night is also distinguished by the simple care with which it has been crafted: For example, Staroscik is careful to provide insight and support into multiple solutions for any problem – including non-combat solutions – looking at not only the short-term, but also the long-term impacts they will have on a game. Perhaps the best example of this is to be found when the PCs enter the tomb of the four witches, in which a tribe of gobbers has taken up residence. This is the same tribe of gobbers which assaulted the caravan the PCs were guarding at the beginning of the adventure – and Staroscik draws a number of different ways in which they can be linked, taking a minor background element and suffusing it throughout the adventure as a whole.

CONCLUSION

The Longest Night is an excellent adventure for any campaign world, and the quality and care which has been shown here is more than sufficient to draw me back for the next two parts in the trilogy.

The strengths of this product have also left me looking forward to Privateer’s release of Corvis: A Guide to the City of Ghosts later this summer. The Iron Kingdoms setting is truly fascinating, and even if I don’t run a campaign there full time, I’ve got my fingers crossed that Privateer will keep walking a fine line which will allow me to incorporate Corvis into another campaign world with relative ease.

And, god help me, I’m even keeping one eye open for their release of the Monsternomicon. Their promise of “unique and useful D20 creatures”, in combination with the monsters shown in this book, have me pleasantly intrigued. (Besides, they actually managed to find a half-way decent name for a monster compendium – and I didn’t think that was possible any more).

In short, to return to the product I’m actually supposed to be reviewing, The Longest Night has left me seriously impressed. You should check it out.

Style: 5
Substance: 4

Title: The Witchfire Trilogy: Book One – The Longest Night
Authors: Matt Staroscik
Company: Privateer Press
Line: D20/Iron Kingdoms
Price: $9.95
ISBN: 0-9706970-0-7
Production Code: WF001
Pages: 64

For the record, although I never wrote a review of it, the Monternomicon is one of my favorite and most-used bestiaries. Privateer Press knocked it out of the park with that one. (I haven’t checked out the 5E version, but have little doubt it’s still worth checking out.)

Oddly, my strongest memories of The Longest Night — which I never found the opportunity to run — ended up being the awkward railroading and undercooked clues, with the result that for many, many years I’ve had a kind of “meh” opinion of the module. I suspect it was because I ended up thinking deeply about those elements of the adventure in a way that ended up fundamentally affecting my thinking on adventure design. (You can see the dawning of the Three Clue Rule peeking out up there. And Alexia was something I was thinking about when writing The Principles of RPG Villainy.)

Rereading my review, however, my focus has apparently done a disservice to the rest of the module in my memory. Maybe I should take the time to finally check out the rest of the trilogy.

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The slave trade in Ptolus is a gray market: It’s illegal to sell a slave within the city limits, but not illegal to own one (although more and more people disapprove or outright loathe the practice). The local trade is dominated by the Ennin, whose operations extend far beyond Ptolus and openly use the city as a distribution center while also maintaining a surreptitious black market.

The Vladaams don’t directly trade slaves, per se, but have deeply entwined themselves with the Ennin’s operations. There are some who consider the Ennin little than a front for the Vladaam, but this is not accurate. The Ennin are actually, unbeknownst to the Vladaams, a front for the Pactlords of the Quaan (Ptolus, p. 125). Most of the Ennin’s leadership are, in fact, Pactslaves.

For their part, the Vladaams are involved with the slave trade in two ways:

• The Vladaams maintain a warehouse as a place where the Ennin can temporarily store slaves who are going to be sold at the Ennin Slave Market (Ptolus, p. 399)
• The Fleet of Iron Sails – specifically the Pride of Morrain, Eye of the East, and Sarathyn’s Sail – are regularly used to transport slaves for the Ennin. These ships collect slaves from the Serpent’s Teeth and deliver them to the Ennin Headquarters (Ptolus, p. 168).

The Vladaam operations are detailed below, while details of the Ennin facilities can be found in the Ptolus sourcebook, as indicated above.

VLADAAM SLAVE SHIPS

The Pride of Morrain, Eye of the East, and Myliesha’s Sail each have a 50% chance of carrying a cargo of slaves. Otherwise, they’re currently carrying normal goods. Check The Fleet of Iron Sails to determine how often they can be found at port in Ptolus.

SMELL OF THE SLAVE SHIPS: The Vladaam Mages assigned to these ships regularly cast prestidigitation to clean out the holds, but it’s not enough to purge the sickening stench that clings to the slave holds – a mix of filth, excrement, blood, and putrescence.

CREWS

Captain: As detailed for each vessel.

Vladaam Mage: Use mage stats, MM p. 347. See Part 13: Red Company of Magi.

Vladaam Guards (1d6-2): Banewarrens, p. 45.

Advanced Vladaam Guards (1d6-2): Use knight stats, MM p. 347.

Sailors (2d8 x 3): Use commoner stats, MM p. 345.

• Proficiency: Athletics, Perception, Navigator’s tools, vehicles (water).
• Equipment: dagger, corncob pipe, chewing tobacco, 2d10 sp, Vladaam deot ring

SLAVE RUNS

• Half Load: 2d4 x 10 slaves
• Full Load: 4d8 x 10 slaves

VLADAAM SLAVE WAREHOUSE

This facility can temporarily store slaves who are going to be sold at the Ennin Slave Market. It’s used as either an overflow storage facility or as a place where the current stock of the Slave Market can be evacuated if the market is threatened by law enforcement. The Vladaams offer this service gratis in exchange for being allowed to use the slaves to process Liquid Pain (in area 9).

DARK LEAF: In order to distance the facility from the Vladaams, the security is managed by Dark Leaf mercenaries (Ptolus, p. 108) overseen by a centaur named Dilar.

DILAR: Dilar is a captain in Dark Leaf and in charge of the mercenaries here, but he is also deeply in debt as a result of gambling at the Oldtown curse den. Unbeknownst to either the Vladaams or Dark Leaf, Dilar is also involved with the chaos cults. (He appears in Night of Dissolution, p. 37, overseeing a meeting at a secret meeting hall just across the street from this warehouse.)

MALAR: Malar is lieutenant in Dark Leaf. He and the centaur used to be friends, but tensions and suspicions surrounding Dilar’s debts and cult activity have driven them apart. Malar would like to either supplant Dilar in Dark Leaf or make the hop to a better position with either the Vladaams or Ennin.

DENIZENS OF THE WAREHOUSE

DILAR (d100)

• 01-25: Area 1
• 26-75: Area 7
• 76-00: Not present

MALAR (d100)

• 01-50: Area 7
• 51-75: Area 9
• 76-00: Not present

Dilar: Use veteran stats (MM, p. 350) with centaur traits.

• +1 greatsword: Melee Weapon Attack: +6 to hit, reach 5 ft., one target. Hit: 11 (2d6+4) slashing damage.
• Alignment: Chaotic Evil
• Equipment: splint armor, +1 greatsword, ring of jumping, broken square ring, coiled viper amulet worth 10 gp, Vladaam house ring, 1 gp, 14 sp
• Languages: Common, Elven

Centaur traits:

• Charge: If Dilar moves at least 30 ft. straight toward a target and then hits them with a melee attack on the same turn, they target gains an extra 10 (3d6) piercing damage.
• Multiattack: Dilar makes two attacks, one with his sword and one with his hooves.
• Hooves: Melee Weapon Attack: +6 to hit, reach 5 ft., one target. Hit: 11 (2d6+4) bludgeoning damage.

Dark Leaf Mercenary: Use veteran stats (MM, p. 350) with wood elf traits.

• Speed 35 ft.
• darkvision 60 ft.
• Spells: druidcraft, detect magic (1/day)
• Fey Ancestry: Advantage on saving throws vs. Charmed condition.
• Trance: Immune to sleep. Finish Long Rest in 4 hours.
• Equipment: Vladaam house ring
• Languages: Common, Elven

Malar: Use master thief stats (Ptolus, p. 612).

• Malar has a Balacazar fiendish slave amulet (Ptolus, p. 398) which allows him to summon a Shoggti (Book of Fiends 5E, p. 199). The shoggti emerges by having its tentacles erupt through the surface of the amulet. There is an ornate B stamped on the back of the amulet, certifying it as a creation of the Balacazars.
• Equipment: Vladaam house ring

Unskilled Laborer: Use commoner stats (MM, p. 353).

Vladaam Mage: Use mage stats, MM p. 347. See Part 13: Red Company of Magi.

Ptolus Map – H6

AREA 1 – WAREHOUSE

This front area operates as a legitimate warehousing business, run by the Vladaams and servicing various local businesses and markets. The ceiling is 50 feet high.

AREA 2 – UPPER WAREHOUSE

This area is basically a very large “ledge” about ten feet above the level of Area 1.

GM Background: This elevated area exists only to make room for the lower storerooms (Areas 4-6). Architecturally this doesn’t make much sense, though. The unintuitive layout exists only to obfuscate the existence of the slave warehouse below.

AREA 3 – STAIRS

These stairs lead down to Area 4.

ALARM: The head of an antlered buck has been hung on the wall of the landing. It has an alarm spell that sends a mental alarm to Dilar. The alarm is triggered by anyone who doesn’t wear a Vladaam house ring.

GM Note: The laborers never use these stairs.

AREA 4 – LOWER HALLWAY

This stone hallway is rarely used.

AREA 5 – LOWER STOREROOMS

These storerooms have the appearance of being used for legitimate storage (barrels, casks, boxes, crates, etc.). Any inspection, however, reveals that there’s a thick coating of dust on everything. Opening the crates reveals that they contain mostly garbage and miscellaneous junk.

GM Background: These storerooms exist only to provide a pleasant fiction masking the entrance to the slave warehouse in Area 6.

AREA 6 – ENTRANCE TO THE SLAVE WAREHOUSE

At first glance, this area is identical to Area 5.

DC 20 Intelligence (Investigation): Several crates along the back wall are fastened together. They can be unlatched from the wall and then slid away to reveal the stairs leading down to Area 7.

AREA 7 – SLAVE WAREHOUSE

A floor of bare stone, worn smooth with a single trap door in it to the right of the stairs. A board with various papers and bills of sale pinned to it has been placed on the wall next to the stairs. A bank of ten levers on the wall to the left. Multiple cell doors line the far wall, extending down a hallway to the right.

LEVERS: A bank of ten levers. They require a key (which is held by someone in this room; with a duplicate held by Dilar) and open the nine cell doors and the secret door.

TRAP DOOR: A spiral stair below the trap door leads down to Area 9.

SECRET DOOR – DC 20 Intelligence (Investigation): The secret door to the east leads to a section of old sewer that was capped and bypassed during a sewer renovation long ago. A section of this sewer breaks through into a portion of Ghul’s Labyrinth, which provides access to the Ennin Slave Market.

POSTED BILLS: Includes the Business of the Vladaam Slave Warehouse handout.

IRON COFFER (10%): There’s a 10% chance an iron coffer is present containing 500 gp, 40,000 sp, and 50,000 cp with instructions to have the Ithildin couriers ship it to the Red Company of Goldsmiths on Gold Street.

AREA 8 – SLAVE CELLS

The facility typically holds 2d20 slaves as an overflow facility from the Ennin Slave Market.

• 75% chance per ship that some of the slaves here were shipped in on the Pride of Morrain, the Eye of the East, or the Myliesha’s Sail. (See Vladaam Slave Ships, below.)

BIG CELL: 25% chance that the large cell holds a special creature/slave. If this is the case, double the number of mercenaries in this room. Examples of such “special guests” could include:

• 1d4 cockatrices
• 1d4+1 ogres
• 1d2 hippogriffs
• Giant Ant Queen

AREA 9 – LIQUID PAIN FACILITY

The main area of this chamber is outfitted as a high-end alchemy laboratory.

COTS: Two eastern niches contain cots on which Vladaam Mages sleep. Small trunks slid under each cot contain (see handouts):

• Vladaam Slaver Mage Spellbooks
• Instructions for the Apparatus of Liquid Pain

LIQUID PAIN APPARATUS: The western niche contains four upright glass cylinders, each large enough to hold an erect man or woman. Shackles suspended from the ceiling allow the Vladaams to string up slaves upside down within each cylinder, while various tubes, syringes, and metallic attachments can be fastened onto someone so hung.

• Liquid Pain: The apparatus allows one to withdraw 2d8 doses of agony (“liquid pain”) from a person suspended within one of the glass cylinders. The procedure lasts for ten minutes and the victim must make a DC 18 Wisdom saving throw or suffer 2d6 Constitution damage. (This is treated as psychic damage for the purposes of immunity and resistance.) On a successful save both the damage and the yield are halved.

Next: Vladaam Slave Ships

The Horror Beneath spends a lot of time shooting itself in the foot.

Review Originally Published May 21st, 2001

This adventure, to put it bluntly, is a mess:

1. You’ve got a bunch of maps. Tragically, three of them are completely illegible. Actually, I don’t know if “illegible” is the right word, because they’re also completely unkeyed. Let’s just say that — between the fact that they are unkeyed and reproduced in a muddy and indistinct greyscale — it’s nearly impossible to figure out what information they’re supposed to be conveying. The fourth map is of a dungeon. This one is keyed with numbers. For reasons beyond the scope of imagination, however, these numbers are not referenced in a standard D&D format. Instead, Metcalf has decided to describe his dungeon in, basically, a stream of consciousness format – dropping the numbers into the middle of the text between a couple of parentheses whenever he feels its convenient. Simply incredible. It takes true skill to deliberately go out of your way like this to make a product as unusable as possible.

2. Metcalf seems to have persistent problems with the English language. My favorite examples are his nebulous sentence structures, which result in treats like this: “He is unarmed and has no weapon proficiencies. He doesn’t think he needs them.” Needs weapons or needs weapon proficiencies? “Steorra’s temple is the oldest and largest in Ravendale.” Oldest and largest… what? Building? Temple in general? Steorra’s temple in general? You’d assume the second, but this passage is made particularly hilarious by the sentence which appears two paragraphs later: “Temple of Saint Tollan: Ravendale’s newest temple, as well as the largest.”

3. What’s truly bizarre is that the adventure spends a bunch of time discussing Ravendale… which serves absolutely no purpose except as a place for the PCs to pick up an undefined adventure seed which is going to take them to another town: Scarborough.

4. When the PCs reach Scarborough they find the entire town deserted… except for one family, the Tendermores. They discover this when they find the Tendermore’s fourteen-year-old daughter drawing water — by herself — from the well. First off, this staggers my suspension of disbelief: Everyone in town has been dragged off by zombies except your family, and your daughter is wandering around by herself? The daughter will take them back to her house, where the PCs will meet her father Jonathon. To add insult to injury, however, Metcalf closes this description with: “…he believes that he and his “boys” can hold their own.” Who are his “boys”? I dunno. Are they literally his sons, or do the quotation marks imply something else? I dunno. Is the wife of the house still alive and around? I dunno. Are there any other daughters? I dunno.

5. As if Metcalf’s lock-lipped descriptions are not bizarre enough, we then get the sequence of events that night when the zombies come: “The Tendermores are not very effective archers, the zombies should have no trouble advancing to the front of the house.” So, in other words, they’ve had no problems holding them off this long – but as soon as the PCs show up, the Tendermores are doomed? Apparently so, because no matter what the PCs do, they will “see two of the Tendermore women taken by the zombies.”

6. Actually, they’re not zombies. They’re grub hosts – which are just like zombies, except they can’t be turned. They are also the way that the Brood Queen (who’s hiding out in that dungeon, which is supposed to be part of an abandoned dwarven citadel, but doesn’t look it) creates her young (the Brood Warriors).

Basically, The Horror Beneath had a semi-decent idea (Aliens in a fantasy setting), but then simply fumbled the ball in executing it. Actually, let me rephrase that: They didn’t fumble the ball. They deliberately tossed it on the floor, tripped over it, broke their leg, stumbled over their target audience, and plunged off a cliff.

It would have been better if the maps had been legible. It would have been better if the presentation had been smoother. Heck, it would have been better if the plot had been comprehensible.

In short: Don’t buy The Horror Beneath.

Style: 2
Substance: 1

Title: The Horror Beneath
Authors: Eric Metcalf
Company: Nightshift Games
Line: D20
Price: $8.95
ISBN: 192933228-9
Production Code: CFE4001
Pages: 32

Style 2? I was apparently feeling generous that day.

I feel bad for Eric Metcalf. He was one of the very first adopters of the OGL and D20 System Trademark License, making the superhero RPG The Foundation and The Horror Beneath two of the earliest third-party 3rd Edition supplements, before the market became glutted with competitors. Unfortunately, this just meant that the entire hobby’s eyes fell upon what were extremely neophyte efforts. Sort of like grabbing someone who just took their first singing lessons and thrusting them onto a Broadway stage. Yeah, the result is terrible. But you can still empathize.

Re-reading this review, it was also interesting seeing my early reaction to someone forgetting how to key a dungeon. Notably, back in 2001, I don’t recall anyone trying to justify this.

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Ultimately, Deep Horizon lacks the space it needs to tell the story it wants to tell.

Review Originally Published June 27th, 2002

Designed for 13th-level characters, Deep Horizon is WotC’s sixth Adventure Path module. Skip Williams, the author, takes us into the Underdark with this one, revealing a developing struggle between beholders, salamanders, and the long-forgotten civilization of the desmodus (a race of bat-like humanoids).

CONTENT

Warning: This review will contain spoilers for Deep Horizon. Players who may find themselves playing in this adventure should not read beyond this point.

One consistent weakness in the Adventure Path modules have been the character hooks, and this remains true with Deep Horizons: They’re tepid at best. You’ll be best off, in my opinion, using them as a way of foreshadowing the adventure.

Of course, part of the reason the hooks for these modules are weak is that, in general, WotC’s authors are not attempting to convey a plot. The Sunless Citadel, for example, is not a module about the PCs attempting to accomplish X, Y, and Z. The Sunless Citadel simply exists – and there are any number of reasons why the PCs might go there.

Similarly, Deep Horizon doesn’t convey a plot – it conveys an environment. A situation. How the PCs enter that situation, and what they do once they’re there, is entirely up to them.

Here’s the background: 300 years ago the desmodus were at war with the drow… and they were losing. In order to save themselves, the desmodus used powerful magic to reroute a magma flow – using it to seal off their city (and, simultaneously, destroy the nearest drow city). Although the desmodus survived, sealed off from the rest of the world (with the exception of small colony of salamanders, who traded with the desmodus for metal ore), every passing year of isolation brought them closer to the brink of extinction.

Three months ago, however, an earthquake reopened the desmodus’ corner of the Underdark. This has created a crisis in desmodu society, and their old ways of life have broken down: The entire race now stands on the edge of a knife, trying to find its way into the new future which has opened up before it.

Deep Horizon details three environments: The first is Chael-Rekshaar, the drow city destroyed when the desmodu redirected the magma flow 300 years ago. Today, it is inhabited by a trio of beholders (supported by a variety of slave laborers). These beholders are excavating the city with their disintegrate eye, searching for whatever treasure they can find.

The second is the Desmodu Enclave, the final refuge of what was – until just a few months ago – a slowly dying race.

The third is the Salamander Citadel, built upon the underground volcano formed by the backed up magma flow created by the desmodu 300 years ago.

Deep Horizon also details a power struggle: As their society has fragmented and redirected itself, the desmodus’ shipments of ore to the salamanders have slowed. This has angered the salamanders, who have allied themselves with the beholders – hoping to wipe out the desmodu once and for all. While the PCs are here, an assassination is attempted against the leader of the desmodu.

Also at work here is the destabilizing effect lying behind the recent earthquake: The ancient magic the desmodu used to seal themselves away is finally having consequences. If the situation isn’t completely remedied, the earthquakes will get worse. Unfortunately, undoing the magic and allowing the magma to return to its natural flow patterns will significantly cool the current habitat of the salamanders – something which is sure to raise their already heated ire.

STRENGTHS

If you want a summary of why you should pick up Deep Horizons, you don’t have to look any farther than the summary of its content: Skip Williams delivers an active, compelling scenario and invites you to bring along your PCs.

Of course, WotC consistently puts together a well-produced package, and this module is no exception: The cover, by Brom, is eye-catching. The maps are well done. The interior art delivers without detracting. The rules are impeccably handled. All the i’s are dotted and all the t’s are crossed.

WEAKNESSES

Unfortunately, Deep Horizon does have one significant problem: It just plain, flat-out lacks the space it needs to tell the story it wants to tell.

For example, the concept of the ruined drow city of Chael-Rekshaar is really cool. But, in actual execution, it’s rendered into nothing more than a single, ruined temple. (The rest of the city is left beneath the lava flow.)

Similarly, the assassination attempt which forms the module’s only substantive arc of plotted action is essentially squeezed into half a page. Its presentation is simply rushed, leaving you more with the sense of an outline than a module.

Which isn’t to say that Deep Horizon doesn’t work: It does. Everything on the page functions. It just doesn’t live up to its potential, and the primary problem here simply seems to be a lack of space. (Deep Horizon wouldn’t be the first Adventure Path module hurt due to its limited page count, either: The Speaker in Dreams was significantly gutted before its release. Ironically, WotC opted to increase the page count of its Adventure Path modules immediately after Deep Horizon — both Lord of the Iron Fortress and Bastion of Broken Souls feature 48 pages).

A less systemic problem the potential DM should keep an eye on is the introduction of the desmodu: I’ve had several DMs tell me that their PCs were initially hostile toward the desmodu, due to the fact that they fall victim to a desmodu raiding party on their way down into the Underdark. (When faced with an unknown race of humanoids in D&D, I’ve found that players tend to assume the worst of anything that attacks them first.) Since the rest of the module assumes that the PCs will be, at the very least, neutral towards the desmodu, this has the potential to cause some problems.

Deep Horizon also has an annoying flaw: The PCs need to travel through the ruined drow city of Chael-Rekshaar in order to reach the Desmodu Enclave. No problem. But the map of the Desmodu Enclave also shows two passages leading off deeper into the Underdark. Problem: If the magma flow sealed off the desmodu, why are there still passages leading into the Underdark? Plus, the descriptive text implies that Chael-Rekshaar was just the nearest drow city involved in the war with the desmodu: But there’s nothing between Chael-Rekshaar and the surface. And the only way to get deeper into the Underdark from Chael-Rekshaar, according to the map, is through the desmodu enclave. So, unless the drow had a habit of living on the surface three hundred years ago, the whole premise doesn’t seem to make any sense.

(This is easily fixed, however: Move the passages leading deeper into the Underdark to Chael-Rekshaar. These passages would have been sealed by the magma – and were recently reopened, along with the passage to the surface, by the earthquake.)

CONCLUSION

Deep Horizon is a good module: The PCs are dropped into a complex power struggle, and are given the opportunity to save an entire race. This module can represent a launching point for the higher levels of your campaign – as your PCs begin to have a larger and broader impact on the development of the campaign world as a whole.

But Deep Horizon isn’t a great module, and that’s unfortunate: Because the potential was definitely there. And with another twelve pages or so it probably could have been delivered on.

That shouldn’t dissuade you from picking this one up, though – particularly if you’ve followed the Adventure Path series to this point. If you’re willing to take the time to expand the material found here – or even just keep on your toes when it comes to improvising — Deep Horizon presents a highly enjoyable gaming experience.

Style: 4
Substance: 3

Author: Skip Williams
Publisher: Wizards of the Coast
Line: D&D
Price: $9.95
ISBN: 0-7869-1855-1
Product Code: WTC11855
Pages: 32
Year Published: 2002

In my retrospective on my review of The Sunless Citadel, I talked about how Justin the Younger was still belaboring under the Plot is Adventure/Adventure is Plot paradigm. You can see the vestiges of this here, as I use it (incorrectly) as an explanation for why the scenario hooks for the Adventure Path modules were so poorly done. (The reality, of course, is that there’s nothing about prepping situations that requires threadbare scenario hooks. Quite the opposite.)

In reprinting these old RPGnet reviews, we’ve skipped ahead a bit with this one in order to release all the Adventure Path reviews together. This was actually one of the very last reviews I ever wrote for the site, appearing on the same day as a review of Atlas Games’ Backdrops. Two years later I would write a review of A Song of Ice and Fire, but these two RPG reviews were the true end of an era. (I never finished reviewing the Adventure Path series.) There were a number of reasons for this, the most prominent of which was that in 2002-03 I was spending a lot more time doing professional freelance work. I also lost my primary gaming group during this time as multiple members moved out of town. Shortly thereafter, I was knocked out of the industry in late 2003 by the post-D&D 3.5 collapse, during which most of the companies I had contracts with simply ceased to exist.

It was a rough time. And, at the time, it felt like I’d left RPGs for a long time. Looking back, though, I can see that in 2005 I both started the Alexandrian and took the first steps to getting a new regular gaming group. So it was just a couple years. And then, a couple years after that, I wrote the viral articles that transformed the site, launched my long-running Ptolus campaign, and started publishing RPG books again. Since then, my road has taken many unexpected turns, but I don’t feel as if the journey has ever been interrupted.

Hopefully the road ahead of us will be long and prosperous!

For an explanation of where these reviews came from and why you can no longer find them at RPGNet, click here.

DISCUSSING
In the Shadow of the Spire – Session 47C: Home Suite Home

Several hours into Ranthir’s candlelit researches, something sinister slithered under the door. Ranthir, intent on the strange intricacies of technomancy, noticed it not as it slipped across the room and attached itself to Tee.

Its first touch was so gentle that Tee didn’t even feel it. And when its voracious, lamprey-like mouths fastened onto multiple points along her spine it was too late… it had taken control of her body. As it drained her lifeblood, she twitched violently on the bed.

Ranthir, unfortunately, remained oblivious.

In The Art of Pacing, I talked about bangs, which are the big, explosive moments that launch scenes. Bangs come in a lot of different forms, and they can be prepped and discovered through play in a lot of different ways. One way that I use them is as a timeline of bangs, a list of events in my campaign status document that are going to happen in the PCs’ future. In practice, these bangs aren’t fully formed — “they’re more like bullets waiting to be fired. When the moment arrives, the actual bang will be customized to the circumstances of the PCs.”

The spineseeker which attacks in this session is an example of what these bangs look like in practice. Here’s how it appeared in the campaign status document:

2. TILAXIC ASSASSIN (9/25/790)

• The cultists summon a tilaxic, one of the Elder Brood.
• Tilaxic (Spineseeker, Book of Fiends 2, p. 58)
• Saavia (from NOD1; she has more levels and Pythoness House biocrystal breastplate)

Let’s break this down a bit.

First, this entry is #2 because it appears on a prep sheet titled “Laurea’s Doom.” This sheet contained multiple responses I planned for the cultists to take after they identified Tee as being “Laurea” (who had infiltrated their ranks and attacked the Temple of Deep Chaos, back in sessions 27 and 33, respectively).

I prepped this sheet as I was getting ready for Session 39, and then added the following entries to my master Event List:

9/22/790 (Evening): Chaos cultists identify Tee as being “Laurea.” They attack the Ghostly Minstel. (Laurea’s Doom)

9/25/790: Cultists send Tilaxic Assassin. (Laurea’s Doom)

9/28/790: Arveth uses Dais of Vengeance on Tee. (Laurea’s Doom)

These would have been interspersed with a bunch of other upcoming events.

Note the “(Laurea’s Doom)” reference, which reminds me to reference the prep sheet for these events. Not every event is supported by a full prep sheet, only those that require enough that they would clutter up the Event List. In this case, the prep sheet included a stat block for Saavia.

The spineseeker is taken, as noted, from The Book of Fiends, a monster supplement published by Green Ronin. (I’ve talked previously about looting bestiaries for my campaign prep.) I’m fairly certain that I created the “tilaxic” species name.

The reference to the “Pythoness House biocrystal breastplate” is one of the items taken by Wuntad and the other chaos cultists when they ambushed the PCs in Session 23. A good example of how you can take a bunch of different loose threads and tie them all together to set up a new situation.

USING THE BANG

As I mentioned before, the bang is incomplete. It needs to be plugged into the specific context of the game session to turn it into an actual scene.

What I know is that:

• There is a spineseeker, which is being handled by Saavia.
• At some point on the 25^th of Kadal they’re going to try to assassinate Tee.

And that’s basically it. At the time I slotted this bang in to my campaign status document, these events were still days away. I had no idea where the PCs would be or what they’d be doing on that date.

So when the 25^th rolls around, I’m looking at the list of current bangs on my campaign status document — of which this is only one — and I’m keeping my eyes open for any moment during play in which the bangs could be useful to

• escalate the action;
• fill a dead spot;
• logically happen;
• or basically anything else that makes me say “oh! let’s do it!’

There are limitations to this, of course. For example, the spineseeker won’t show up in the Banewarrens because the chaos cultists don’t know about the Banewarrens. So if the PCs, for example, spent the entire day of the 25^th in the Banewarrens, then this bang probably wouldn’t happen. (Although perhaps I might trigger it offscreen and the PCs might return to the Ghostly Minstrel to discover that there have been some strange deaths on the premises in their absence.)

Other bangs might be more restricted in time or place or circumstance (or they might be less so). Regardless, if the right moment arrives, I’ll use the bang (crossing it off on my campaign status document). And if it doesn’t, then that bang goes back in the bandolier (or simply gets deleted if it’s no longer relevant or useful).

In this case, getting ambushed at the Ghostly Minstrel was probably always the most likely use for the bang. But that can still leave a lot of questions that can only be answered in the moment: Who’s asleep? Who’s awake? Where are they? What time is it? And so forth.

So there’s a bunch of variables that can, literally, be in play here. But, in practice, it’s really pretty simple: You look for the moment where the bang makes sense. You combine what you prepped with the given circumstances of what’s happening in the campaign at that moment. You pull the trigger and frame up the scene.

The bang itself often requires very little prep, because the alchemy of the table will supply you with all the rich context you need to bring it to life.

Campaign Journal: Session 48A – Running the Campaign: Contract Handouts
In the Shadow of the Spire: Index